- Camera work is controlled and steady throughout most of the extract - Framing of shots is mostly well conceived with elements included / excluded as appropriate - Shot distances are varied throughout the extract - The material is appropriate to the task set, however it becomes quite repetitive. This results in the later half of the extract losing focus. - Mise-en-scene has been clearly thought out with effective use of location choice, colour and lighting throughout the extract. - Editing is competent - there is considerable scope for improvement here which will also improve pace and continuity. Particularly, in the development of the duel narrative. - Shot transitions are effective but need to be better timed towards the later stages of the extract. - Both diegetic and non-diegetic sound have been used effectively throughout the extract. However, as the editing falters towards the end of the extract, the match-on-action loses focus making the mood of the extract inconsistent. - Titles are well made and feel appropriate to the genre, however they could be more evenly paced across the extract.
Targets for improvement:
- You need to include Production Company etc. at the beginning and hold a single frame of black for longer. - I also recommend introducing the running water sound earlier and even more gradual - raising the volume very slowly - this will develop the mood of your opening more effectively. - Later you have lost your way - some poor choices of shots have been included. - Also, some shots need to be held for longer. - Your titles need to be more evenly spread across the piece. - Finally, you need to add more focus on to the antagonist as that is whom you are trying to establish.
Improvements we discussed as a group:
- Production Company with a very quiet sound of running water in the background - Move titles to the beginning - Remove music - maybe introduce it at the character - Increase the length of the shot of the eye or move the shot - Titles after Jonny washes his hands? - Replace music with an ambiguous music - Creshendo music at the end - More focus on Jonny and his environment. More shots - less of Abbie. - Music is overpowering - make it more subtle - Slower zoom to the door - Move the tilt of Jonny before he washes his hands - Hold the shot of Jonny looking in the mirror (1-2 seconds longer) - Running shots are ineffective - remove. - Use different angle of shots for Jonny - Jonny - show where he's going as he leaves the bathroom. Follow him into a room - Include a mirror in the room - reflection of Abbie seen - links in with the title - Shorter flash backs
Filming went well. All shots are now complete and are ready to edit. Personally i believe my practical camera work has improved. After editing the shots will reflect the codes and conventions of the thriller genre. Over the period of filming i believe my camera work and understanding has significantly improved.
Filming today wasn't very successful. We where organised with the equipment however due to the timing our shots where very dark and couldn't be used. We worked as a team and discussed ideas well however this also slowed us down and delayed time. From this we have learnt that timing is crucial when shooting. To compromise will shoot during the middle of the day when there is constant light and use Adobe After Effects to make the footage darker.
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*Question 1 – In what ways does your media product use, develop or
challenge forms and conventions of real media products?*
Our opening thriller sequence...
Evaluation
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In what ways does your media product use, develop or challenge forms and
conventions of real media products?
Our thriller incorporates generic conventions...
